It is in my pied eyed skies
that the perchance seems to hide
It is in the dance of the two footed jump
that impetuous leaves me scarred and bumped
It is in this spin that I take the biggest risk of all
and choose to watch patiently as love falls
It is in my lap resting as only an infant can
helpless to the gravity of this untreaded land
It is in these hands that I hold the all of you
watching as each of our petals start to bloom
Contributed to Open Link Night with dVerse Poets Pub
The World Poetized 
It is in the dance of life that we feel our souls–Lovely write!!
what a pleasure to read! You have a strong voice–I think I would be able to name you as the poet in a blind reading. I love your use of the near-rhyme. the way “you” blooms into “bloom.” So sweet.
Love the images, love the rhythm and the two line structure works so well. The first stanza would be my favourite, but it’s all good.
Excellent work.
I love the repitition throughout, it adds to the importance of each statement. Enjoyed this a lot.
So many and all come together adding to the true in of ones self, great write.
it was the middle stanza that got to me the most rose…the greatest chance…and letting love fall…ugh def a hard one…and your do work repetition very well in this….
Holding a baby and watching it grow, is just as lovely as a bloom. what a gift of a poem .
Lovely write, the last two lines just awesome.
How beautiful. It is in the spin I take the greatest risk of all. That line touches me. I wish I could tattoo it. I love the beauty of a risk and the beauty of your writing. Excellent once again.
Nice poem C Rose.
Beautiful images and warm sentiment. Just lovely.
beautiful Rose… the first two lines are stunning, love the rhyme between pied, eyed, and skies.
lovely poetry. — C.
On the way to that truest of loves…the ONE! Wait patiently, and it will happen–is what I counsel peeps. Purpose, and power are in your poetic lines here.
Gratefully,
Steve
PEACE!
It is in…really like this as an opening to each line, very much has an identifying, taking ownership type of quality to it. Really love the way that first stanza sounds, the “eyed” sound repetition x4 is great. Also, really like the progression here, from chance, to impetus, to choice, to helplessness, to observation- really good job. Thanks
letting go first is sometimes the key to see that love finally bloom…a very moving piece rose..
“It is in this spin that I take the biggest risk of all” and the final stanza…that truly resonates with me…tho, the entire poem is strong with imagry and beauty. Lovely, Rose :))
intense momentum carries thru the power and sense of spin and fall – love it! 🙂
This talked to me about needing to take risks in life, about jumping in with both feet, it spoke to me about the purity and essence of life- as simply put as a child sleeping on your lap. The repetition certainly gave it great rhythm and I love poetry that takes this form. I think ultimately this was a piece that spoke about the risks and difficulties that life presents- but that we have to find the strength to face them head on- otherwise- are we really living?
Amazing write Ms C Rose!
This is lovely.
http://halfwaybetweenthegutter.wordpress.com/2012/03/20/if-you-could-see-me-now-2/
Your words and delivery makes the reader concentrate which is a good thing in this case. Nice job.
Wow! well done..
“It is in these hands that I hold the all of you
watching as each of our petals start to bloom”
felt the rejuvenation .. thanks for share..
Liked the words you used and repeated to introduce each stanza , kewl indeed
Very cool.. 🙂
Very well written, this poem brightened up my afternoon – thanks!
don’t often hear of each petal blooming but that is quite nice, and perfectly worthy of a closing image.
Beautiful! i really enjoyed the world play 🙂
I meant ‘word play’, of course ;P